OMG. The eat his daughter line is great!
Make sure you set it up correctly. By the time you say “eat his daughter” the audience needs to already know the information about Attila The Hun for it to make sense. Keep the writing short and concise to make the joke pop.
If it is what you say it is… I love it :p
Wow. Great analysis Bruce.
I think my personal favorite is “What world do you live in where you’re constantly f****in'” [draws weapon from holster repeatedly]. It really lands a hard blow to the argument that having a gun “somewhere in the house” is enough.
LOL. I enjoyed this premise. I especially like the idea that people overuse Hitler. It seems like that’s people’s “default bad guy.”
First, I’d say you should explore the comedic conflict regarding how/why people use Hitler, even if there are famous and non-famous people who exemplify what a person is doing wrong. For example, you would never see…[Read more]
Sorry for the late reply.
I wouldn’t quite put this under opinion-based, but it’s some fun stuff.
I love the idea of advertisers being a dick to you. When you phrase it like that there’s a lot of violation for you to play with. Your material gave me this mental image of people trying to “fix something very broken.”
Try this premise:…[Read more]
FOCUS: Opinion-Based Humor
1 – LESSONS:
LESSON: Read the lesson on Opinion-Based Humor (click here). (note: this FNF lesson was updated. Make sure you read the new version.)
EXAMPLE VIDEO: Watch “Jim Jefferies – Gun Control” video (click here)
2 – COURSE DISCUSSION:
JIM JEFFERIES ANALYSIS:
Jim Jefferies’ performance about gun contr…[Read more]
The extra line is a tag line. It doesn’t really have extra comedic tension. A good tag line lets you play inside of the juxtaposition you create in the punchline. Personally, I think playing around inside the juxtaposition is one of the best parts. Once you find some pieces that work, you play around with them and recombine them in different…[Read more]
Hey everyone, quick heads up. I’ll be on vacation for a few days. Feel free to email me any questions you have. I likely won’t find time to do any critiques until I’m back. I’ll be back in 2-3 days.
When I come back I’ll be posting more content on how to develop opinions and observations into material.
Keep up the great work! You guys are doing awesome.
Hey all, so I’ve been trying to decide if I should release some of my own material and let you guys comment on it. Perhaps having this might help you guys in your own writing or with structuring your own material. I have no formal plan or expectations for this post. This is what of my many “Do it and see what happens” experiments.
Anyway, here’s…[Read more]
@BruceL, great critique.
@ncurield, what if you drop hints as to what kind of bear you want your partner to buy you as you’re fighting with him? Also, a line like “Oh… that bear just got 1 foot taller!” would be a great comeback line.
If it’s done correctly, the audience should have a very easy time putting the fight in the right context.…[Read more]
I saw the notes, but I’d recommend typing everything out. It makes it easier to see exactly what is being said. When you’re revising your material, it’s nice to look back at the setups and ask yourself “what information is most important?” and “Will the audience be able to easily understand the important info?”
In general, new comedians tend to…[Read more]
Jared Volle replied to the topic Step-By-Step to Comedic Conflict: Experimenting With My Own Theories in the forum Course Discussions – Week 2 1 month ago
it’s really about using what you got. When the topic contains a lot of safety/boredom, then you need to find ways of bringing interesting violations in. The more boring a topic is, the more fun it is to make fun of people who deal with it.
The opposite is true as well. The more violation is in the starting topic, the more you need to create…[Read more]
I grew up in the Midwest.
In a really small town.
My hometown is sort of like the town in Footloose, except it was legal to dance, – it was just that no-one was good at it.
You think it’s hard to date in the city.
Try doing it in the middle of a cornfield.
ENDING A DATE IN A CORNFIELD IS HOW I’VE ALWAYS PICTURED DATING IN NEBRASKA.
Do you kno…[Read more]
Hey Chris, thanks fo the video! It’s great to see the delivery. Also, I’m very jealous of wherever you live. Looks beautiful.
First, can you edit this post and add the text? I doesn’t have to be perfect, but it’s a huge help to go back and remember what’s been said and how it was written.
Second, this is a remarkable job at expanding on a topic.…[Read more]
Jared Volle started the topic Step-By-Step to Comedic Conflict: Experimenting With My Own Theories in the forum Course Discussions – Week 2 1 month ago
Hi everyone, I got a super-interesting email about little while ago asking me to walk everyone through my strategies for creating comedic conflict. Below you’ll find my stream-of-consciousness. I tried my best to slow down and write my thoughts, but I did get ahead of myself a few times. Check out what I wrote below. I’ll try to revisit this idea…[Read more]
I’ve added assignments to Week 2 forum. Let me know if you have any questions.
- Go through the recommended lessons below.
- Post your set to “Critiques (Week 2)“
- Review at least 2 other students’ sets
- Contact me and let me know what topics you want to see in week 3.
You guys have been doing great. Right now, there are 7 active students in the group. You’ve completed between 10% and 65% of…[Read more]
Hey Nicole, great stuff. We can definitely use this to get everything rolling. Let’s take 2 paths at the same time:
I especially love the second joke. I never noticed this, but as I was reading it I could totally see how weird it is. Try editing out some of the unnecessary words/sentences. See if you can get it down to around 2-3 lines that even…[Read more]
Shannon… OMG, this is a great start. Just reading this intro makes me want to hear more. The wall pictures and the sober karaoke are great starting points for a story. I even want to hear more about the Alice Cooper story. There’s a lot of potential there.
By the way, your weakness can also be a strength. You can get away with a different…[Read more]
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