I’m certainly not there yet but it’s probably fun in some weird way to look back at your earlier material and say hey “this stuff was funny” or “what the hell was I thinking about?” when I wrote this bit.
My conclusion to this is: Is a Joke Ever Really Finished?
Or is it always in the continuous revise/reanalyze mode…….
Thanks for sharing!
I’m posting this forum topic to discuss whether adding extra comedic tension, conflict, etc. after a punchline actually helps or hurts (“milking) a joke.
I wrote 2 jokes below that have an original punchline then I added another level of comedic tension, etc.
Did the added “tension” take away or add to the audience’s experience? As always,…[Read more]
Chris: sorry that I didn’t get back to you sooner.
Best of luck with your set.
As I’m (slowly) learning, often what you first write joke material it’s a beginning of a journey to get the right ingredients to get it to flow into the conflict/violation or vise versa interactions.
I agree with Jared that you have a great (and enviable) ability…[Read more]
As per Jared’s and others suggestions I’ve revised some of my material to hopefully provide more comedic conflict. I’ve also written new material for this post as well. As always, I’m open for suggestions to improve. Thanks!
“25 Years Marriage”
Proud to say that my wife and I just celebrated our 2 5th wedding anniversary. …[Read more]
Bruce Lipsky replied to the topic Step-By-Step to Comedic Conflict: Experimenting With My Own Theories in the forum Course Discussions – Week 2 6 days, 21 hours ago
Jared: great impromptu “lesson”.
Your methodology and logical steps from a mundane topic to joke was very enlightening.
As I have mentioned many times, I can come up with the topics, get the story going but have problems really nailing the punchline.
When I think of paper clips I tend to look at how new many boxes I have in my house but t…[Read more]
Nicole: great and unique joke topics. Coming from a novice, my impressions are that the set ups are very wordy (I’m guilty of this as well) and this may lose the audiences attention but the punchlines have great impact (funny).
“This was during a time that he did not have a car, so he was using mine to drop me off at work and go to work…[Read more]
I truly appreciate your candid feedback and encouragement. I know that this is a “process” and it takes a lot of writing/reworking/trial and error to develop an effective routine(s).
When I took the Stand Up class they encouraged 1-2-3 premise of quick jokes (just in case a joke tanked) and were not in favor of “story telling” which I…[Read more]
Thanks for taking the time to read and review/critique my posts. It’s interesting that you brought up about expanding on some of my joke topics. This was my thought process as well but the Stand Up University comic’s/professors method encouraged quick 1,2,3 punchline jokes. I agree some work well that way but I had more material to ex…[Read more]
The second Rodney joke in completion.
My wife isn’t very bright.
The other day she was at the store, and just as she was heading for our car, someone stole it!
I said, “Did you see the guy that did it?”
She said, “No, but I got the license plate.“
I always was told that I was spontaneously funny so I decided last June to enroll in a 6 week “Stand Up University” class given by some local comedians on Long Island, NY.
Graduation night (week 7) would involve performing my set (with 9 other new comics) in front of our friends and family. Playing to a packed house, probably 200 people (of…[Read more]
2 jokes from one of my favorite comedians: Rodney Dangerfield:
Safety/Conflict well balanced:
“One day as I came home early from work, (S)
I saw a guy jogging naked. (S)
I said to the guy, “Hey buddy…why are you doing that for?” (S)
He said, “Because you came home early.”(C)
Conflict/Safety well balanced:
“My wife isn’t very bright. (C)…[Read more]
Jared: Thanks for the encouragement. Here’s a few of my favorites from Sebastian Maniscalco:
Sebastian Maniscalco: Passover Meal, When the Doorbell Rings:
Here’s my 7 minutes of “fame” : https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1d2FWKnvucs
Looking forward to “w…[Read more]
FAVORITE COMEDIAN(S): Rodney Dangerfield, Don Rickles, Sam Kinison, Sebastian Maniscalco,
COMPLETE THE SENTENCE: “I see myself as an “older” comedian (in age) who wants to have fun and see if I can get the experience to perfect my skills to perform and entertain.”
HOW MUCH EXPERIENCE DO YOU HAVE WRITING/PERFORMING?
Very minimal-…[Read more]